Section 19.4 Concision: Eliminating Wordiness
Concise writing is not short writing. It is writing that says exactly what needs to be said and no more. The distinction matters because concision is not about cutting ideasβit is about cutting words that are not doing any work. Every unnecessary word costs the reader something: attention, time, the sense that the writing respects them. When a sentence uses ten words to say what five words could say just as clearly, the extra five are a burden.
Wordiness tends to cluster in predictable patterns. Once you learn to recognize these patterns, you can revise efficiently rather than agonizing over every word.
Concise writing says what needs to be said without unnecessary words.
Redundant Pairs.
Some word pairs appear so often that they have come to feel natural, but both words mean the same thing. You only need one.
| Wordy | Concise |
|---|---|
| basic fundamentals | basics or fundamentals |
| true facts | facts |
| past history | history |
| future plans | plans |
| consensus of opinion | consensus |
| completely unanimous | unanimous |
Meaningless Modifiers.
Intensifiers like very, really, and quite often signal that the base word was not strong enough rather than that it needs amplification. Similarly, some adjectives are already absolute in meaningβunique means one of a kind, not almost one of a kind, so very unique is not just redundant but logically confused. When you find yourself reaching for an intensifier, consider whether a more precise word would serve better.
Remove words that add nothing:
| Wordy | Concise |
|---|---|
| really quite interesting | interesting |
| very unique | unique |
| absolutely essential | essential |
| completely finished | finished |
Wordy Phrases.
Many common phrases in formal and academic writing use five or six words where one would do. These phrases often feel more official, which is why writers reach for themβbut they add length without adding precision or authority.
Replace phrases with single words:
| Wordy | Concise |
|---|---|
| at this point in time | now |
| in the event that | if |
| due to the fact that | because |
| in order to | to |
| a large number of | many |
| is able to | can |
| has the ability to | can |
| make a decision | decide |
| give consideration to | consider |
Empty Sentence Starters.
Sentences that begin with It is important to note that or There are many people who delay the actual claim. The real subject and verb are buried later in the sentence, and the opening phrase does nothing but stall. These constructions often appear when a writer is warming up to a point rather than making it directly. Cut the warm-up and start with the point.
Avoid weak openings:
| Wordy | Concise |
|---|---|
| It is important to note that... | (just state it) |
| There are many people who believe... | Many people believe... |
| It is my opinion that... | (just state your opinion) |
| The reason why is because... | The reason is... or because |
